Writing is a process, and the first draft is rarely perfect. Strong writers improve their work through revision. After reviewing and revising your literary argument paragraph, what changes did you make to strengthen your writing?

 Writing prompt: Some revisions I made to make my writing strong are being able to find a quote that strongly supports my claim. In addition, I also went in further detail on why I chose the quote and referred it back to my claim. To be able to explain and convince the reader why this is as it is.  I think I had written a strong start to my body essay, there were just a few minor setbacks that I think I can be able to fix. 

Summary: Today we revised our body paragraph. 

Reflection: Today I learned the changes that needed to be made in order to make my body paragraph stronger. 

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